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A change by Cinderella

My gun shook, as if it was afraid of my pocket. My eye's darted this way and that. Afraid of any movement. Harper, went on without a notice. I thought I was ready for anything, turns out I wasn't even close. A shot rang out. Me? I wasnt aware. Pain, struck me hard in the back. Was the bullet in my back? No, someone else had taken the fall. That was Harper. Knocking me to the ground, he screamed in agony. I slid over to look at a man in black. Terrorist. Mom. These words slip into my mind, but I quickly push them out. I was in a crisis, and I was not good at those. The man paced slowly forward. I could tell that he was afraid, and new to this "honor." I crawl to my dying friend. My only friend. He crys while death whispers in his ear. " This is all my fault." I say trying to make death go away. " Then fix it" was his only reply. My shaky knees stood, ready to fall to the ground. There wasnt much I could do. Helicopters started to swirl around me. Ready to clean up this mess that was about to take place. My gun dropped from my pocket onto its best friend, the ground. Without any hope left I started to walk forward to give my self up when, I heard a shot from behind me. " GET DOWN!!!" it said. I quickly obeyed its' command. Lying next to Harper I turned up to see.... a woman. She was a couple years older than me and looked vaguely familiar. She flipped over me and Harper as if we were totoally invisible. In awe I watched her dive into a stop, and slide for her gun. It was already at her landing point. She took it and used it like an old friend. Flippping and shooting, it never ended. Helicopters were blowing up, and the ka-booms were so loud that I buried my ears into Harpers wound to end the ringing. Then silence. Frightened, I looked up to see her face. Beautiful and with the hint of crazy in her eyes. She glided forward like she hadn't just killed around 25 people. I rose up to meet her face. For a second we just looked at each other before she said " Where, is dad?" How could she say something like that? I haven't seen here for almost 5 years!! " He was dead when I came home last night, no evidence was found about who killed him." A tear was pushing my eye to come out, but I wouldn't let it. " Okay , let's help your friend." She kneeled down onto the blood stained gravel, turning Harper over. " Its okay" she soothed him " Everythings going to be alright." "Scarlett?" He asked looking up into the orange colored sky trying to find me. " No," said the girl " I'm Peyton, Scarlett's missing and wanted sister. Now I have to inform you kid's about some new rule change's in the game. We have declared war on the terrorist's in Aphganistan, and we are going to have the time of our life trying to get back our freedom and justice that they have taken." Do you like it??? Please comment!!!!!! I want to know!!! I need some feedback!!!!
( Want to read the first story??? { Yes this is the second story} Look up The Rules of the Game!!!)